Thanks Grassy, it's actually meant to have a very pompous tone, so glad you
picked that one up and appreciate you comments on the wordiness. Needs some
trimming, I know.



bw
James





>From: grasshopper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New Sub: Welcome To The Slaughterhouse
>Date: Mon, 8 Mar 2004 00:59:43 -0000
>
>Dear James,
>  It's often very difficult to comment on poems that are meant as
>performance
>pieces as the criteria seem to be very different from poems presented on
>the
>page, as 'twere.
>But, for me, this seems very stilted and over-wordy, - a bit pompous, in
>fact, so it didn't really draw me into the poem.
>Kind regards,
>            grasshopper
>
>----- Original Message -----
>From: "James Bell" <[log in to unmask]>
>To: <[log in to unmask]>
>Sent: Saturday, March 06, 2004 12:49 PM
>Subject: [THE-WORKS] New Sub: Welcome To The Slaughterhouse
>
>
> > I've road tested this one at a reading and it seemed to go down well.
>I'd
>be
> > interested in responses to it on the page, so to speak.
> >
> > WELCOME TO THE SLAUGHTERHOUSE
> >
> > We have decorated the slaughterhouse with geraniums,
> > politely requested that sense descend upon the carnage.
> >
> > We have supplied for the event cocktails and nibbles
> > to blight the famine
> > invite all at dinner afterwards to eat of a third world
> > without conscience, for the supermarket - our caterers -
> > will pay them.
> >
> > We will give the prize for snapshot of the year -
> > digital of course -
> > where the models in arty matt black and white will
> > be seen to have transcended their anorexic conditions;
> > people from nations that have been thoroughly cleansed
> > and now suitable for the drawing room will speak
> > the same language as us with charming accents
> > having lived to tell the tale.
> >
> > Hell, we can now declare, is B&Q* on a Sunday - there is no limbo.
> >
> > Kurt Vonnegut,the creator of time traveller Kilgour Trout,
> > will later host a special edition of Antiques Roadshow
> > with fragments of Dresden China.
> >
> > Fragile empathists, who have become vegetarians
> > at the sight of raw meat
> > will hover around geranium varieties names after pacifists.
> >
> > Adrian Mitchell will attend later after revisiting the Albert Hall
> > without a standing ovation
> > on and old age pension depleted by the cost of ammunition
> > fired with depleted uranium.
> >
> > After dinner, he and many supporters from left of centre
> > who read the Guardian
> > will occupy the last Public Library to freely display banned books
> > from many countries and poetry by poets who did not
> > write about World War One.
> >
> > So, welcome to the slaughterhouse - we are glad you have come -
> > remember though, the night is still young.
> >
> > *B&Q - A UK DIY store.
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > bw
> > James
> >
> >

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