Thanks yes you are right. Will try and comment on some poems in the future.
Take care Sally
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: In The Library
>Date: Thu, 11 Mar 2004 05:12:02 EST
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>Hello Sally. Lovely to see your pixels back on screen with such a warm,
>light-hearted poem. I don't know whether it's been mentioned before, but I
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>whether you'd considered 'I sit' rather than 'sat' to bring the whole poem
>into the present? I love the last four lines.
>bw
>christina
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>Silence Please
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>The library is busy with computers click clicking
>old and young tap dance the key boards
>books waltz on the shelfs
>even the the videos are jiving
>and I sat between two men
>write a poem off the cuff
>it slivered down my left arm
>from the hole in my heart
>were poetry emerges
>like the newborn
>enters cyberspace
>where angels sit on the
>mother board and scream.
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>Sally James
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