Thanks Bob
I sort of felt that "since then" was important but didn't know why. You are
right about the second then though.
H
----- Original Message -----
From: "Bob Cooper" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Wednesday, March 10, 2004 12:07 AM
Subject: Re: New Sub: Ball and Chain
> Hi Helen,
> Ouch!! This hits hard.
> I'm not sure about the word "then" - I sort of feel I want to read "And
now
> I wait..."
> And you say there's no violence in it! Maybe not explicit, but...
> I also like the first words: "Since then" and how they anchor everything
you
> list into the narrator's history. It's great to realise how powerful such
> small words can be in poems, how they work, what they do!
> Bob
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> >From: Helen Clare <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: New Sub: Ball and Chain
> >Date: Sat, 6 Mar 2004 07:49:24 -0000
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> >sex rather than violence this time... but some of you may not like it!
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> >Ball and Chain
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> >Since then I've tied a ligature round the scrotum
> >of a man I nearly loved. Put another on a leash
> >and dragged him round a certain kind of club.
> >Felt the weight of Ben-wa beads falling through me
> >as I walked. And then this sickening wait
> >for you break that final link and sign away
> >a marriage I bore like a prolapse of the womb.
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