Hi Sally
Good to see your pixels again.
I'm not sure whether the dancing metaphor really takes off here - perhaps
its a little predictable.
What I do like is the way the poem ends. There's some real surprises here.
The idea of the poem from the heart being turned on his head by that
shocking phrase "hole in the heart" and the fact that the angels scream. It
undermines its own imagery and I think that gives the poem zest.
H
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From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Tuesday, March 09, 2004 3:24 PM
Subject: new poem In the Library
> Sorry I haven't been in touch so many things have happened and my computer
> has not been working for ages. I wrote this in the local library.
>
> Silence Please
>
> The library is busy with computers click clicking
> old and young tap dance the key boards
> books waltz on the shelfs
> even the the videos are jiving
> and I sat between two men
> write a poem off the cuff
> it slivered down my left arm
> from the hole in my heart
> were poetry emerges
> like the newborn
> enters cyberspace
> where angels sit on the
> mother board and scream.
>
> Sally James
>
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