I'd want more Christina. I think if left as it is I'd make more space in and
around the poem. It's a bit squashed at present.
bw
James
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: Scoop
>Date: Fri, 5 Mar 2004 05:33:11 EST
>
>Dear All,
>Sorry not to have responded to comments about other pomes yet. Hope you
>don't mind if I post this inconsequential bit on nonsense.
>bw
>christina
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> Scoop
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> Camel cashmere examines a suitcase
> abandoned by a council skip. Clips clip,
> straps strap; Mmm… pucka!
> A stroke of supernatural luck
> this icy morning when you’d think
> nothing’s to be found in these streets
> but trashed condoms and dogshit.
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> christina fletcher
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