Thanks for the suggestion James.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 03/04/2004 5:46:18 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< Hi Ryfkah,
"the rue of our nubile bond" is a terrific phrase here, however I feel it
doesn't belong in this poem and could be cut without detracting from the
rest... and use in another poem. I've done it and it works. Hope this helps.
I like the [poem by the way.
bw
James
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