Hi there John, long time no see!
Although I appreciate the structure of this, the way the lines represent
the rhythm of waves, the cadence, etc., the actual content is a little
wishy-washy, if you'll pardon the pun! lol Just my 2 cents...
Cheerwell, Mary :O)
--- Carley <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> everywhere I turn
> ------------------
>
> I shouldn't feel alone
> here on the beach we know so well
>
> the beach we have always shared
>
> the sand still makes the mountain
> and the mountain makes the sand
>
> wave after wave
>
> a sound to soothe the mind
>
> I shouldn't feel alone I know
> for still the roses grow in clusters
>
> grandest parks and wildest places
>
> always there is scent and colour
> everywhere I turn
>
> I shouldn't feel alone it's true
> to do so might dishonour you
>
> but brother
> though the moon is in the sky
> and though the stars are shining
>
> though the dawn is soft as love
> and though the birds are singing
>
> may God forgive my weakness
> for just now
> I feel alone
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Good Cheer & Be Well,
Maryann Hazen Stearns
"Under The Limbo Stick" http://www.geocities.com/Faerhart/
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