Are you using just the letters in your name to write a poem? I think you did
it very well. However you use "it", "...stole it all away". I really think
it sounds just as good or better to say "stole all away". I may be off the
mark and not know what I'm talking about, so please bear with me.
Annabelle.
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From: The Pennine Poetry Works [mailto:[log in to unmask]]On
Behalf Of Arthur Seeley
Sent: Wednesday, January 07, 2004 3:38 AM
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Subject: Re: A bonkers idea
The tears that start
are the tears that star her eyes.
They wash sorrow's slow ways
to loose the truth they lost or worse
to show how truth was hurt;
where truth really lay,
the street, the house, the day,
the who. How weasel words wore
her weary heart to death
and were the tools that stole it all away.
Arthur Woods Seeley
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