hi helen,
thnaks very much for your carefull, thoughtfull & very
helpful comments & suggestions. I'd felt sometime
missing from the draft, but line breaks and
punctuation were/are questions I have. BTW, nothing
you mentioned felt anal to me and I appreciate your
help.
Spent the day yesterday at a one day writers retreat
and carried a copy of this draft along with me. Didn't
share it when reading time was offered, but had an
hour to study it myself, with some emotional distance
from the thing. Added two new lines {found the element
that I'd felt missing from the original draft} and
played with line rearrangements and puncts...but want
to wait a bit, feel into it, before I revision,because
this morning i'm not so sure about the twonew lines.
Anyway, thanks again, much
later
calaya
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