Shalom James,
In a message dated 02/19/2004 4:38:33 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< Hi Ryfkah,
I like this piece very much. Wonderful atmosphere. I guess Gary would rage
against "singing" in the last line. "The Baby sleeps sings to the
celestial night" with the gap is an alternative.
bw
James >>
I think singing is okay; I am very careful about gerunds...I like the sense
of continuing activity that happens with them. They should be used judiciously.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
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