> Hello Ryfkah,
Many thanks for your feedback on this one. You´re quite right about not using caps in the title. As for all those words....Actually, I´m not very talkative, so maybe I over-compensate in writing. This is almost becoming quite confessional, isn´t it?
Best wishes, Mike
> From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
> Date: 2004/02/16 Mon PM 07:11:00 EET
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: new sub: Hide and seek
>
> Shalom Mike,
>
> In a message dated 02/16/2004 4:42:49 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
>
> << when I, as seeker, hid what I sought
>
> and you, well hidden, subtly delved into that secret >>
>
> Your ending is powerful. I like the extended metaphor; it works. May be
> consider not capping all the title and have it flow into the poem?
>
> I want to edit to get rid of some words but then that is I.
>
>
> kol tuv, Ryfkah
>
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