Shalom Mike,
In a message dated 02/16/2004 4:42:49 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< when I, as seeker, hid what I sought
and you, well hidden, subtly delved into that secret >>
Your ending is powerful. I like the extended metaphor; it works. May be
consider not capping all the title and have it flow into the poem?
I want to edit to get rid of some words but then that is I.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
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