Sally,
I had wondered as much after sending my comments.
BW
Colin
----- Original Message -----
From: "Sally Evans" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Thursday, February 05, 2004 9:51 AM
Subject: Re: New sub: poetic justice
> Thanks Colin, I should have sorted the typos at the time. My eyes arent
very
> good for screen work..I need to reread everything before sending and
> sometimes I forget.
> Of course if my typing were perfect it would be all right.
> The poem is not so much comic as rueful, I suppose.
> bw
> SallyE
>
> on 4/2/04 10:27 pm, Colin dewar at [log in to unmask] wrote:
>
> > Sally,
> >
> > I don't enjoy humorous poetry as much as some, but I like this a lot and
> > apart from the typos, easily remedied with a quick whiz with the
> > spell-checker, it's very neatly put together. Every cloud has a
> > ..............positive spin. Still those nasty vandals could do with a
good
> > talking too and it sounds like they got off lightly. Also, let's hope
the
> > narrator doesn't get blamed for having a flammable shed.
> >
> > I note a build up of negatives in the last stanza that detracts from the
> > neatness of the poem a little.
> >
> > BW
> >
> > Colin
> >
> >
> > ----- Original Message -----
> > From: "Sally Evans" <[log in to unmask]>
> > To: <[log in to unmask]>
> > Sent: Tuesday, February 03, 2004 9:01 AM
> > Subject: New sub: poetic justice
> >
> >
> >> Hardly a poem - more like an apology for absence
> >>
> >> Poetic justice
> >>
> >> When your garden
> >> shed burns down,
> >> huge firemen ome
> >> in darkness with
> >> their flashing vehicles
> >> and hose it down
> >> to crumbling charcoal
> >> smouldering and wet
> >>
> >> it is not poetic
> >>
> >> yet when you tot up
> >> the little damage -
> >> twice demoted
> >> storage units,
> >> empty flowerpots,
> >> thigns for the tip,
> >> you smile rueefully,
> >> and readily admit
> >>
> >> it is not tragic.
> >>
> >> and when you consider
> >> the inprovement to the garden
> >> aaaschitecture, and that
> >> one less ugly shed
> >> exists in the world
> >> and y our boat wasn't in it
> >> you almost feel like
> >> going out sepcially
> >>
> >> to thank the vandals
> >>
> >> but you don't because
> >> you don't suppose
> >> they guessed you weren't fussed
> >> for that old pushbike
> >> or knew in adcaance
> >> you didn't realise
> >> you liked th egarden
> >> better without the shed -
> >>
> >> poetic justice.
> >>
> >> Sally Evans
> >>
>
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