Also I am intrigued by stone streaked with pyrites. I'm not sure that you
get the full impact of the metaphor here or risk tipping it the wrong way.
Iron pyrites after all is fool's gold. But a stone streaked with fool's
gold? Yes it could happen in real life. I'm not worried about that. But it
conveys something valueless shot through with something apparently valuable
but actually valueless. If you want value go for some other precious metal
or mineral - lots to choose from . If you want to convey gaudy deception
make the whole "stone" iron pyrites, I say.
Colin, I prefer the first for much the reason you noted. I resisted taking
the second to surreal which might have made it brighter.
As for pyrites. Depends. Yes, ordinarily they are valueless, but for for
the reason stated - a worry stone - they may not be. The value there is a
small indentation for our thumb or a bump to rub. One of the those I have
is little more than hardened clay, no value except what I give it.
A streak of pyrite - gold like - would be interesting enough to make a worry
stone special and in the right light might show a picture or design.
Thanks.
Gary
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