Thanks, Sally, glad you liked the piece of the bigger poem, which is a
sequence and tends to take different forms. I'm growing more towards having
a form even although it is esentially free verse.



bw
James





>From: Sally Evans <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New Sub: The Ripple Effect
>Date: Thu, 5 Feb 2004 17:32:13 +0000
>
>I like this kind of work, James, and I an see the point of that rather set
>stanza. It's come out set differently on this reply, but that's not a
>serious problem. A stanza form like this lets you get on with the story, or
>discussion.
>bw
>SallyE
>
>on 5/2/04 12:44 pm, James Bell at [log in to unmask] wrote:
>
> > I'm working on a couple of long sequences at present and this is an
>extract
> > from one called "The Ripple Effect. Nice to get some C&C.
> > - -
> > Leonardo would stand for a day at a time
> > watch the ripples a stonw would make
> > on hitting water
> >
> > though not a poet he would sense the rythmns
> > that circulated in the air ready to be plucked
> > like word fruit
> >
> > found desire was not to be taken from the air
> > but to join its prescence more fully above
> > rivers and fountains
> >
> > examine the movement of waves and consistency
> > of clouds from his imagined machine that would
> > hover in the air
> >
> > All this came from being still - fasting though
> > feeding on thoughts - travelling the journeys
> > they took him upon
> >
> > In a day he would watch a ripple yet listen
> > to many poems - see wonders on his journey
> > and set them down
> >
> > in notebook and memory as if looking into
> > a mirror with no ripple in the glaze
> > or mercury
> >
> > only full understanding of the experience
> > that minds of his own time would not hold to
> > on a flat Earth
> >
> > where a peasant could not be a philosopher
> > the world be round and heavier than air metal
> > transport delight
> >
> > outside the design of nature - Leonardo
> > would watch the ripple effect
> > and sigh
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > bw
> > James
> >
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