it sounds so benign and new, a good thing
we should all get into. "People give up
their freedom to come into hospital and so deserve
the best care". I decline the tea from habit
as she takes a sip with blameless, bloodless lips.
Colin
Colin, a good end, but overall I find the poem all too prosey. I would cut
by a third and braid the dinner with the conversation, dropping the
reference to the tooth in S1. Let that come out later.
Gary
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