I like this kind of work, James, and I an see the point of that rather set
stanza. It's come out set differently on this reply, but that's not a
serious problem. A stanza form like this lets you get on with the story, or
discussion.
bw
SallyE
on 5/2/04 12:44 pm, James Bell at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> I'm working on a couple of long sequences at present and this is an extract
> from one called "The Ripple Effect. Nice to get some C&C.
> - -
> Leonardo would stand for a day at a time
> watch the ripples a stonw would make
> on hitting water
>
> though not a poet he would sense the rythmns
> that circulated in the air ready to be plucked
> like word fruit
>
> found desire was not to be taken from the air
> but to join its prescence more fully above
> rivers and fountains
>
> examine the movement of waves and consistency
> of clouds from his imagined machine that would
> hover in the air
>
> All this came from being still - fasting though
> feeding on thoughts - travelling the journeys
> they took him upon
>
> In a day he would watch a ripple yet listen
> to many poems - see wonders on his journey
> and set them down
>
> in notebook and memory as if looking into
> a mirror with no ripple in the glaze
> or mercury
>
> only full understanding of the experience
> that minds of his own time would not hold to
> on a flat Earth
>
> where a peasant could not be a philosopher
> the world be round and heavier than air metal
> transport delight
>
> outside the design of nature - Leonardo
> would watch the ripple effect
> and sigh
>
>
>
>
> bw
> James
>
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