Thank you Mike; somethings to think about.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 01/21/2004 1:14:57 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< > Hello Ryfkah,
I like the wistful tone of this poem and its escapist
atmosphere. I don´t know if that´s how you intended it, but I read it in that way. I´m
wondering a little about the word `parlay´. Should it read `parley´ as in
holding talks. Although, I´m not sure then that decisions would parley, rather
the people who make the decisions. Another word that made me wonder was `lilt´.
This word makes me imagine a soft and gentle sound and that feels not quite
right for aeroplane propellers. Apart from these two small queries, I enjoyed
the pem a lot.
I hope this is useful.
best wishes, Mike
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