sue, i appreciate the sentiments and the work reads
well but a couple of questions/suggestions.

IF* i'm translating what the work is saying, I think
the living in a cliche is a great place to start, AND
i'd ask you to consider adding I feel like a cliche
living in a cliche.

Becalmed doesn't seem to fit; cutting it and just
going with numb sounds, er, more fit.

As for the 'end", and agin, supposing I'm hearing what
the work wants to say,I'd consider stopping here:
I stand here numb,
and around me the leaves
fall, build in mounds,
and the wind speaks
over and over again
accept accept accept.

The rest feels unnessecarily repetitious &
distracting. This is a strong, strong, S, and is the
meat of the work IMHO.

later
calaya

 Divergence

I am living in a cliche,
here at the end of this road
the one that forks
and goes on
bordered by a steep cliff.
If I take the correct path
something is bound to happen.
Perhaps I can follow the trail
and see where it leads or perhaps
stopping here is all.
Or if I choose not to take
that worn trail, well,
there is always the cliff.
But who wants to choose that?
No.  I can accept.  What I can't do
is let go.  For I know
what it is to hang from the cliff
with bloodless fingers,
lungs longing for air.
I stand here
becalmed, numb,
and around me the leaves
fall, build in mounds,
and the wind speaks
over and over again
accept accept accept.
As if there were a choice,
as if there were two roads,
old Frost.  We have to do
what we have to do;
and it makes no difference
at all.

Sue Scalf


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