Calaya
I didn't get round to looking at the first draft, but I really like the mood
of this and the colours and the way that military imagery seems to be
subverted all the way through. And so many signals.
Nice work.
Helen
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From: calaya <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Tuesday, January 20, 2004 7:07 PM
Subject: Re: reVision: Gunmetal Mourning
Gunmetal Mourning
Icy winds hail a flag dressed in double faces.
Daybreak greets its war missive.
Skies cry gunmetal blues.
Winged things ascend.
Snowflakes drop on limbs.
Behind the signals' post,
beyond a birch grove,
currents exhale across a near horizon.
A woman dressed for two worlds
wails; cataracts cast transparent spaces
'round the standards' missive.
Dawn howls louder than the phone.
Sad, "Hello?" tones.
Scales older than wrong numbers.
Notes heavy as starless reds,
black-hole whites and dispirited blues.
calaya
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