A strong poem, Calaya. "None is" might be better than "none are" because
"none" is short for "not one"....... but you might not want to know.
BW
Colin
The eyes beneath our skins are opening. A STRAGELY DISTURBING WAY OF LOOKING
AT THINGS, WHICH SUITS THE TONE OF THE POEM, I THINK.
We are the babies you threw out
with the bath water
NICE TO SEE THIS EXPRESSION MAKING ITS WAY INTO A POEM. I use it a bit
myself and like it.
and our heads rotate
three hundred sixty degrees.SHADES OF THE EXORCIST HERE.
Here is what we see
with a stare beneath our hides:
what we ran from back there
we're running into
here:
head on.A STRONG ENDING IMO.
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----- Original Message -----
From: "calaya" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Tuesday, January 20, 2004 3:21 AM
Subject: Re: New: Collision
C & C, if you please
calaya
Collision
According to streams of unconscious babble
none are responsible for this violent
species extinguishing, population exploding
toxic life; shut up.
The eyes beneath our skins are opening.
We are the babies you threw out
with the bath water
and we are alive
and our heads rotate
three hundred sixty degrees.
Here is what we see
with a stare beneath our hides:
what we ran from back there
we're running into
here:
head on.
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Collision
According to streams of unconscious babble
none are responsible for this violent
species extinguishing, population exploding
toxic life; shut up.
The eyes beneath our skins are opening.
We are the babies you threw out
with the bath water
and we are alive
and our heads rotate
three hundred sixty degrees.
Here is what we see
with a stare beneath our hides:
what we ran from back there
we're running into
here:
head on.
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