Please see below for sugg's. In gen, I'm less impressed by the first third
of the po than by the remaining two thirds, but with a little reworking of
the first third it could be an even more interesting poem.
BW
Colin
Colin, thanks. I do prefer betrayed than judged. I'm giving though about
how to change the poem, but do not wish to remove the contrast between the
jefferson and washington parts.
Gary
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