Hello dear all,
What a lovely response. Thank you.
Christina I'll try to remember to decrease the font. It's the standard one
used on my web page and is as I was taught to do it, so not much thought
follows it, I'm afraid.
Mat - still around. Writing like a fool, but not submitting much to lists.
I'm a bit of a bore really.
Michi thanks for detailed crits. I was troubled by the change of tense too,
but couldn't really see my way around it. I'll try again.
I've got a little over twenty of this series done now - up to
post-operation. This particular voice keeps recurring - the man in the
street trying to make sense of what his mate is doing, generally horrified
or confused in the process. I have to leave town now, but with your
indulgence I might submit another for comment.
Cheers - glad the piece reads well pre-edit.
Frank
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