The Routine
Relay-race with changing batons -
a flower deposited in the womb of autumn,
contemplation vivified as snow over a mountain,
waves trying to define the ocean,
all around the same pattern - hesitant and broken.
Need a circle always be vicious?
--
c s shah
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> Topics of the day:
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> 1. Spring Arrives in the Country Lanes (2)
> 2. Sub: Remains
> 3. A Sestina of sorts: To Find Spring in Winter Flight
> 4. Final revisions for today: Spring Arrives in the Country Lanes
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> Date: Thu, 1 Jan 2004 06:58:13 -0000
> From: The Walkers <[log in to unmask]>
> Subject: Re: Spring Arrives in the Country Lanes
>
> Thanks for the comments everyone. They seem to be perfectly apt. A little
> more practise and I'll be able to hone my work to a high standard.
>
> I considered the end of the poem, Ryfkah, and agree in principle. These
> lines keep the sense but introduce new imagery to the poem. Here goes ... A
> rewrite of the final four lines:
>
> ..sinew.
> Walk unnoticed or affected
> amidst the frenetic energy,
> reanimated within,
> a seasoned clock spring.
>
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> Date: Thu, 1 Jan 2004 07:15:09 -0000
> From: The Walkers <[log in to unmask]>
> Subject: Sub: Remains
>
> This is a terse black comic poem in two stanzas:
>
> I fixed my gaze on the ivory basket
>
> that once had been dressed so fine.
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> Splendid regal habiliments of
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> blanch blooms from the jade vine.
>
> Atopped by broken pate with yellow headstones set,
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> with ne'er a clue, as how to, his demise was met.
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> Date: Thu, 1 Jan 2004 08:20:59 -0800
> From: Gary Blankenship <[log in to unmask]>
> Subject: Re: A Sestina of sorts: To Find Spring in Winter Flight
>
> I tooo find something very special in the sighting of birds - redbreast a=
> nd
> wagtail in particular for me, I think.
>
> Cheers,
>
> Frank
>
> to me the sign of spring are the goldfinch, but robins and their relative=
> s=20
> count.
>
> Thanks.
>
> Gary
>
> Writer's Hood, the best poetry on the web, at http://www.writershood.com=
> /=20
> Poets for Peace.... =A1Poemas s=ED, balas no!
> =20
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> Date: Thu, 1 Jan 2004 08:56:06 -0800
> From: Gary Blankenship <[log in to unmask]>
> Subject: Re: Final revisions for today: Spring Arrives in the Country Lanes
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> Leslie, welcome to the Works. =20
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> I have this thing about ings and wish you could find a way to change a =
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> Smiles.
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> Gary
> who may be the only one who does have the thing that is
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> Date: Thu, 1 Jan 2004 14:48:42 -0500
> From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
> Subject: Re: Spring Arrives in the Country Lanes
>
> In a message dated 1/1/2004 1:58:13 AM Eastern Standard Time, [log in to unmask] writes:
>
> > I considered the end of the poem, Ryfkah, and agree in principle. These
> > lines keep the sense but introduce new imagery to the poem.
> > Here goes ... A
> > rewrite of the final four lines:
> >
> > ..sinew.
> > Walk unnoticed or affected
> > amidst the frenetic energy,
> > reanimated within,
> > a seasoned clock spring.
>
> I think this is an improvement. I wonder if you could just stop with reanimated within?
>
> kol tuv, Ryfkah
>
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c s shah
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