Thanks - and 'quite so'
It sounds as if you have been having some of that disruption too.
The 'anymore' is supposed to be a contrast to the 'night' and 'day' and
'morning' of the first stanza - something to do with
eternity/endlessness/the-big-stuff-they-never-told-us-about-in-our-school-ca
reers-lessons irrupting into the daily round of getting and spending and
chucking the whole thing haywire.
I'll think about it.
Ta
Terri )O(
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From: The Pennine Poetry Works [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf
Of Christina Fletcher
Sent: 30 November 2004 01:50
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Subject: Re: Ouch
Hello Terri,
How lovely to see your pixels on screen again.
Your poem resonates. It's neat and memorable. How we deal with things that
completely disrupt us, eh? I wonder about 'anymore'. It feels superfluous
and perhaps a weak note to end on. I wonder whether you need it? What do
you think? bw, christina
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