> Hello Sally,
I like the hectic/chaotic rhythm of this piece, it suits the subject. I donīt think the rhyming is really necessary though and certainly not the inversion in the last line. I have doubts about `rolling around mudī, but if you put in an `inī it will work better. Please do not give a second thought to the use of `bollocksī. Not only is this not a swear word, it is actually one of the most beautiful words in the language which sadly has received a bad press.....and pressed bollocks doesnīt bear thinking about ;-)
Best wishes, Mike
>
> Just a bit of fun I found this poem in a cardboard box don't know when I
> wrote it but seeing it is the season for the sport thought I'd send it. I
> must have written it at least hmmm ten years ago.
> Is bollocks a swear word? If it is am sorry
>
> The rugby match
>
> Shoulder padded macho-men roll around mud
> bollocks protected, faces splattered with blood
> black thighs and muddy boots form tumble-tossed scrum
> a tug on the shorts reveals firm builder's bum
> whistle-tongued ref, yellow-cards the scrum half
> the sin bin to suffer and then early bath.
>
> sally james
>
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