Thanks for the comments Matt. I guess for better or for worse I've got to
stand by the phrase that really came as a revelation when I watched the
scene.
bw
James
>From: "Merritt, Matt - Leic. Mercury"
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>Subject: Re: New sub: Sermon On A Sandbank
>Date: Wed, 24 Nov 2004 10:31:54 -0000
>
>Hi James,
>The Jesus image is a really interesting one, but I got a bit lost with
>"it's
>a space between a bleakness that is close to desolation". Doesn't it need
>to
>be between the bleakness and something else?
>I like the mood at the end though - there's a Stanley Cook poem whose name
>I
>can't remember in which he realises with a bit of a jolt at the end that he
>is part of the scene he has been describing, and it sort of reminded me of
>that.
>Regards,
>Matt
>
>-----Original Message-----
>From: The Pennine Poetry Works [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf
>Of James Bell
>Sent: 20 November 2004 15:03
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: Sermon On A Sandbank
>
>
>One from the notebook and part of the estuary sequence again.
>
>SERMON ON A SANDBANK
>
>There is some kind of debate going on
>at the turn in a sandbank where the geese gather
>some on land, some on the very flat water -
>
>several wings flap, some honk -
>it's like a version of Jesus giving a sermon
>while standing in a boat on the Sea of Galilee -
>
>though nobody walks on water and all boats
>are moored way off nearer the shore -
>it's a space between a bleakness
>
>that is close to desolation
>except for this band of pilgrims observed
>only by you and a curlew who passes on foot
>
>
>
>bw
>James
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