Hi Ryfkah,
I like a lot of the images here, and the Biblical/Garden of Eden setting
they create. Like Bob I was struggling a bit with the last two stanzas, but
that was just on first reading.
I agree with Mike (I think he was the one who mentioned it) that the first
line sounds great too.
Regards,
Matt

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Subject: New Poem: Intimate


Intimate

Harvest half moon looms
The river's rush moans
as a woman giving birth
Needled trees exude perfume

The man reads Wang Lei to her
the exotic words turn erotic
He gently caresses fingertips
kisses her lips like a poem

Coyotes call to one another
near a lake once pregnant
now aborted by greed
The man and woman recall

A buck nibbles at the picnic
turf hush without tourists
His harem behind also graze
A bluebird flies in the azure sky

The Sequoia hovers
a giant with burnt bark
inverted triangle topped
Snow licks the ground

The woman fondles the tree's
spongy skin placing her face
against its ancient life
A tear of awe snakes

Ryfkah 11/21/04
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