Hello James - I think you take too long to get to the point and when you do
you spell it out too clearly - it's already implicit. Some cutting would be
good?
Lovely images.
best wishes
Catherine
>
>I've been doing other things so not able to participate recently. Here's
>one
>from the ongoing estuary sequence. It could be quite huge by the time I've
>finished. Comments welcome on this early draft.
>
>GONE
>
>A Canada goose stands on one foot
>static
>a statue facing into the wind head first -
>
>There is no other bird around it only
>a small wader
>walking at the waters edge someway downstream -
>
>if you don't write this down image down now
>you will forget it.
>
>You find you have written it down and
>the goose
>still stands on the same foot -
>
>somebody asks if this is your list for
>Santa Claus
>for that's coming around soon
>
>Al this will be gone by then and the memory
>fade
>just like the appearance of another wader
>
>fifty or so metres upstream who approaches
>near the goose -
>you look up from writing this and see the wader
>
>is still there and the static goose gone and it's
>nearly time
>for you too move on - the river birds and you
>
>all appear like constants but in a while
>we'll all
>be gone
>
>bw
>James
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