> Hello Gary,
             Thanks for your comments. There may well be some confusion in what I was trying to do here. I´d imagined the opening stanza being a scene before the speaker of the poem and S2 introducing images remembered from Linna´s  novel and the poem as a whole mixing the ppresent and the past that is all around us. I rather fear that the mixing is the only thing that really comes across :-( 



Best wishes,   Mike

> 
> Mike, generally I like the way this plays out, but here
> 
> Fields yellow under the sun
> where the scythe´s blade once swung
> from Nordic dawn till sundown.
> 
> The illumination of each tree, the mower´s
> unsteady foot on the threshold,
> light cast on each door jamb, range
> and outhouse, the retreat of snow
> 
> something bumps - a change in tense from once swung to the mower's foot or ?
> 
> or maybe it is only cause it is 541 am
> 
> but something because later we have we have stumbled
> 
> Thanks.
> 
> Gary
> 
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