Mike, generally I like the way this plays out, but here
Fields yellow under the sun
where the scythe´s blade once swung
from Nordic dawn till sundown.
The illumination of each tree, the mower´s
unsteady foot on the threshold,
light cast on each door jamb, range
and outhouse, the retreat of snow
something bumps - a change in tense from once swung to the mower's foot or ?
or maybe it is only cause it is 541 am
but something because later we have we have stumbled
Thanks.
Gary
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