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> Hello Christina,
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> I like the very spare, pared back style of this one. The tone reminds a bit of late Plath. If there´s a phrase that I feel I want to change it´s `find wearing clothes´. I think I get the idea, the clothes the speaker plans to wear today but it seems a rather awkward way to say it. However, that may be me just being bound by convention.
Best wishes, Mike
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> Ritual
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> Words come slowly
> or they're lost.
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> Find wearing clothes, lay them out
> in battle order. Check for blood,
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> smooth the duvet, hoover
> crushed beans, crumbs; clear
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> drinking things. Draw curtains.
> Light shines,
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> objects ache for adjectives.
> Master on/off thing.
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> Touch, touch for tea bags.
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> christina fletcher
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