Thanks Arthur. Yes I am sorry I know that men do shed tears too, When I
first wrote the poem I wrote it in first person then later changed it to
"our" to encompass all women. Thanks for the comments I have since amended.
bw Sally J
>From: Arthur Seeley <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub. A woman's path
>Date: Thu, 11 Nov 2004 11:07:04 -0000
>
>Hi Sally. Nice rhythm to this piece. You think wrongly if you think that
>only women shed tears however, but I can accept the thought as it stands.I
>have enbedded some changes , quite minor, for you consideration. Regards
>Arthur.
>----- Original Message -----
>From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
>To: <[log in to unmask]>
>Sent: Thursday, November 11, 2004 10:34 AM
>Subject: new sub. A woman's path
>
>
> > A woman's path
> >
> > Our path is a stream that rolls like a teardrop
> > down mountains and gullies
> > to dry river beds.
> > We splash over boulders
> > bone white in the summer
> > and seep underground in the dead of the night.
> >
> > We merge in the valley
> > with new paths in the springtime
> > when snows of the winter
> > change water to wine.
> > It is there we will marry and laugh in the sunshine
> > and race with the fishes right down to the sea.
> >
> > Too soon we must part and divide in the ocean
> >where all our tears become salt for the waves.
> > Forever and ever this cycle continues
> > as mist from the sea causes clouds to be formed,
> > burst over mountains and roll
> > with the raindrops like tears from all women
> > way down to the sea.
> >
> >
> > Sally James
> >
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