Hi Sally. Nice rhythm to this piece. You think wrongly if you think that
only women shed tears however, but I can accept the thought as it stands.I
have enbedded some changes , quite minor, for you consideration. Regards
Arthur.
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From: "Sally James" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Thursday, November 11, 2004 10:34 AM
Subject: new sub. A woman's path


> A woman's path
>
> Our path is a stream that rolls like a teardrop
> down mountains and gullies
> to dry river beds.
> We splash over boulders
> bone white in the summer
> and seep underground in the dead of the night.
>
> We merge in the valley
> with new paths in the springtime
> when snows of the winter
> change water to wine.
> It is there we will marry and laugh in the sunshine
> and race with the fishes right down to the sea.
>
> Too soon we must part and divide in the ocean
>[ and ]where all {of}our tears become salt for the waves.
> Forever and ever this cycle continues
> as mist from the sea causes clouds to be formed,
> [which] {that} burst over mountains and roll
> with the raindrops like tears from all woman{ women?}
> way down to the sea.
>
>
> Sally James
>
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