Hi Mike,
I think Gary's making an interesting point here. I always think of squirrels
has beng nimble and quick, then stationary, then rapid footed! I find the
start of the poem so slow. The place gary's mentioned is where I speak as
rapidly, as scurringly, as I feel squirrels move!
Do you realy need the start of the poem, the bits before she gets a mention?
Bob
>From: Gary Blankenship <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub: Red squirrels
>Date: Thu, 21 Oct 2004 11:07:57 -0700
>
>Mike, I would start at
>
>Sujata, my squirrels also chase each other
>round and round the trunk of a tree.
>It´s not as meaningful as anger,
>not so directed as lust. I´ve seen them touch.
>
>The parts before that too prosey to me.
>
>Good end.
>
>Thanks.
>
>Gary
>
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