Sally, if I may suggest a couple of small changes
There are too many pointed hats
too many black hats reaching for the stars. (reach)
There is an age old mystery seeping underfoot (start at An age and the seep)
it clings with dewy frost on soggy soles
Good read, Pendle and her clan.
Smiles and thanks.
Gary
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