Hi Matt. Thanks for reading and responding. I am glad you enjoyed my little
meditation on medication. You are absolutely correct about the apostrophes.
The school teacher in me blushes. Arthur.
----- Original Message -----
From: "Merritt, Matt - Leic. Mercury" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Saturday, October 23, 2004 9:46 AM
Subject: Re: New Sub: Medication
> Hi Arthur,
> Piggy-backing on Sally's mail here because for some reason your original
> email got blocked by our IT department. Bizarre! It allows all kinds of
junk
> mail about viagra through, but not a poem.
> Anyway, I liked this, and the whole idea behind it, and wouldn't change
> much. I think the repetition works well, and the last verse has real
impact.
> My only quibbles would be that "light or fading dark, rain or shine" seems
a
> bit redundant, and could probably be cut. Also, and this is with my
pedantic
> sub-editor hat on, should it be "veins' and bowels'"? It could make sense
as
> it stands, and obviously you, as the patient, know better than us, but the
> plural sounds more likely.
> But those are minor quibbles. Good read, IMO.
> Regards,
> Matt
>
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: The Pennine Poetry Works [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf
> Of Sally James
> Sent: 22 October 2004 18:30
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: New Sub: Medication
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> Hi Arthur, Yes I know the feeling, having to take tablets every day is a
> bind. just one quible you have "two dark ways" in one line. Could one
> perhaps do? Like the "rain fish tailing" Bw sally J
>
> >From: Arthur Seeley <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: New Sub: Medication
> >Date: Thu, 21 Oct 2004 11:40:16 +0100
> >
> >Medication.
> >
> >
> >
> >Weary years
> >
> >that trail their weariness
> >
> >through my vein's and bowel's
> >
> >dark ways. Dark ways
> >
> >where years and life
> >
> >press and thread.
> >
> >
> >
> >Each morning,
> >
> >light or fading dark
> >
> >rain or shine,
> >
> >heavy rain fish tailing on the patio
> >
> >or sunbright dew across the lawn,
> >
> >I pop the foil, pop the pills.
> >
> >
> >
> >Seven, fourteen
> >
> >coffins popped,
> >
> >emptied foil strips,
> >
> >emptied days,
> >
> >weeks, fortnights;
> >
> >rag-lipped yawn
> >
> >of empty graves.
>
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