Hi Gary,
Like others i find the hand clapping lines disrupting in the poem (a tad
hackneyed, perhaps). I can link it to the ancient stones you mention (ie
your student is learning from what's been taught and said long ago) but it
still stands out too much IMO.
Bob
Who's wondering, too, if the notes relate to your poem as well as to the
four lines they follow...
Bob, hackneyed is the reason the lines are they. They are the most common,
most quoted zin lesson. I want their staleness in this place as a way of
describing the self-taught student.
Does he really understand the gate and oxen, the pottery koan - or is he
mostly a fake?
Thanks.
Gary
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