Hi Gary,
As always I admire the transformations you make of Wang Wei's poems. I
thought there was a slight overingulgence in this one with the second stanza
and allusions to one hand clapping. The only dull note you've stuck in the
series as far as I'm concerned. Hope this is of help.
bw
James
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<< I hold my left hand in front of me,
it does not clap. >>
Wowy zowy my bro!
kol tuv, Ryfsis
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Opinions vary. Sometimes over the top needed, sometimes perhaps not.
Thanks much to both of you.
Gary
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