I really like this James. The way the title is in Capitals and the poem in
small case.  It has a touch of the Stevie Smith in the last couple of lines
which is nice. I will admit to liking no punctuation and small case and the
title seems to shout at the reader almost as strong as the poem.  It has
underlying themes which I think is good.  It speaks of strengh and the glad
to be alive feeling in contrast to the deadness of the wood. You speak of
the elements and of nature and there is nothing more refreshing that being
reminded of this. Thanks Sally J

>From: James Bell <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New  sub: Still
>Date: Sat, 16 Oct 2004 11:32:44 +0000
>
>A firstish draft of another estuary series poem.
>
>
>STILL
>
>you stil break out into sunshine
>still face the cold westerly wind
>that does not attract many
>to this place where you sit
>
>hit a sudden blast of rain -
>from shelter you can see
>the log branch that floated
>beside you as you walked
>
>downriver and thought it
>like a cormorant's neck and head
>as it continued to bob and imitate
>as the submerged log carried on
>
>left you behind at the end
>of the quay - though in minutes
>you see it from a vantage point
>out on the estuary
>
>stalled though still bobbing
>a short distance from a real
>cormorant - for you there is
>sun and wind to say-
>
>you are still alive - not
>wood and only bobbing
>
>
>
>bw
>James

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