Thanks Gary, Will revise this some more. "No man's" does sound a bit better,
"They" meant the scientists. But this is not too clear I will admit. Sally J
>From: Gary Blankenship <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New Sub Another marriage bites the dust (Revised )
>Date: Tue, 12 Oct 2004 08:05:37 -0700
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>Sally, a good read but choppy in parts and needs consistent puncuation -
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>Not man's faults or woman's either (perhaps No man's fault or woman's
>either.)
>who can take the blame, guess it's neither (Who...
>they say this world's not meant for two (They... :)
>according to the scientists, anyone can do.
>
>The world moves on, nothing ever stays the same
>but granny can never play their lover's game
>hopes everything will eventually turn out right, (She hopes ?)
>tries to catch their babies falling through the night.
>
>
>Thanks.
>
>Gary
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