Sally, a good read but choppy in parts and needs consistent puncuation -
Not man's faults or woman's either (perhaps No man's fault or woman's
either.)
who can take the blame, guess it's neither (Who...
they say this world's not meant for two (They... :)
according to the scientists, anyone can do.
The world moves on, nothing ever stays the same
but granny can never play their lover's game
hopes everything will eventually turn out right, (She hopes ?)
tries to catch their babies falling through the night.
Thanks.
Gary
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