Hi Catherine,
This intruiges me! I like the way I'm having to focus on things that are far
away (the sea, the shingle) and closer (the window, the photograph) and the
last line is great!
I like the word "solace" but I'm wondering a lot about the word "soiled."
It's very dramatic, very powerful. I'm not sure, tho, how much meaning the
particular word gives me... (why chose soil as a metaphor?). I can't answer
the question.
Bob
>From: catherine JF <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: new sub: Dimbola Lodge
>Date: Fri, 8 Oct 2004 12:27:38 +0100
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>Dimbola Lodge*
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>Soiled soul, who can look but feel nothing;
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>nothing for the Dufy blue sea framed in the window,
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>for the visceral pull of tide on shingle
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>and the cormorants airing their wings.
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>Solace is found third-hand, in the print of a photo,
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>through the safety of someone else's lens.
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>* Julia Margaret Cameron Museum - Isle of Wight
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