Hi Ryfkah,
I like this piece but I couldn't help thinking the "who by..." stanza was
over polemical for the rest of the poem and that the poem otherwise carries
your plea/message/statement.
bw
James
>From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New: Atonement
>Date: Wed, 29 Sep 2004 23:56:28 EDT
>
>Atonement
>
>Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take
>but by the number of moments that are breathtaking. –Anonymous
>
>The goat released to the wilderness
>
>I put on white shoes
>the ones Mary gave me
>because they didn't fit
>
>The men wear their kittels
>buried in tradition
>married to women
>kept in the home
>out of the wilderness
>
>Dreams of barbecue
>banana splits
>candy bars
>even hard boiled eggs
>
>Who by earthquake
>Who by fire
>Who by sword
>Who by AIDS
>
>We plead pardon
>
>White light bounds
>a gold crown dances
>
>My soul recreated
>
>Ryfkah 9/29/04
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