Dear Bob,
Thanks for the comments. I wasn't sure whether to include the last verse
because it was that little bit too nonsensical. The visual of an inkwell
with a swell on it - spilling out over the page in a sort of verbose
psychologist's inkblot, sums up the whole poem, but it didn't leave me a lot
of room for manoeuvre with the closing line - I'm still playing it around to
get it working. Maybe if they were the other way round it would help.
Regards,
Russ
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