> Hello Ann,
Many thanks for your comments on this one. I find the idea of dropping the lover´s tongue very interesting and I´m going to play around with that. Thanks.
Best wishes, Mike
> Lähettäjä: "V. W." <[log in to unmask]>
> Päiväys: 2004/09/15 ke PM 07:28:59 GMT+03:00
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> Aihe: Re: [PK] Huh, call that summer?+new sub
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> In a message dated 15/09/2004 09:05:52 GMT Standard Time,
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> A nice one Mike,
> the rhythm is subtle but seems disturbed in places. If I were to make
> changes it would be 'So unlike the dry thirst' I would omit ''burning sand
> and'' also I would omit reference to the lover's tongue i.e. leave it at 'like
> the taste of a lover who left long ago'
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> again a very captivating piece
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> regards Ann
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> Like a difficult wine,
> > made of a sensitive grape,
> > summer here often fails.
> > But one year in ten
> > there are days when the air
> > is as soft on the skin
> > as a lover´s caress,
> > so unlike the burning sand
> > and dry thirst of southern lands.
> >
> > Days that live in the memory
> > like the notes of a favourite melody
> > recalled through the years.
> >
> > Memories to be sipped,
> > as one sips an amber Sauternes,
> > the essence of summer on the tongue
> > like the taste of the tongue
> > of a lover who left long ago.
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