Hi Bob,
have you come across the concept of the sentence-long poem, ie a poem in one
sentence? They can be quite long sometimes. Well, page-long anyway. the
thing is if writing one of those to avoid "lists'.
all best
SallyE
on 14/9/04 11:39 am, Bob Cooper at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> This began after Arthur mentioned a TV programme (and I started imagining
> something completely different!).
> I'm still playing around with how long sentences should be! Punctuation can
> help clarity, but it can also slow things down! Anyway, this is where it's
> got to.
> All comments welcome:
>
>
> Each Tuesday Night At Nine
>
> Again I see the district where you live
> on the telly. It’s easily recognisable, scenic,
> can look romantic filmed in low light,
> and, if they want, it can easily be found
> by those who see each episode,
> who’ll watch repeats, buy videos of the series,
> and who may want to stand at the spot
> where the script gave them something
> they knew said how they’d feel being there.
>
> But I lose the plot, see instead
> your hand inserting the key, and mine
> marked by the weight of carrier bags
> closing the door. Then I hear the quiet
> forgettable things: the low rumble of pears
> tipped into the bowl, the crackle of cellophane
> as the misshapen carton of paprika’s set down -
> And did we speak? I doubt it as the kettle’s filled -
>
> then the heroine turns from a similar window,
> “I don’t know what’s happened,” she says
> tears in her eyes, “Where did we go wrong?”
> But now I’m just watching the screen,
> the close-ups, the pauses. I know how it ends.
>
> Bob Cooper
>
> And it's not the best of titles...
> (OK, OK, stop making excuses! If it's iffy you'll probably get to know!)
>
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