Hi Matt, Thanks for your comments. These were indeed Canada geese. There's
huge flocks gather on the Taw estuary here.
bw
James
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>Date: Mon, 6 Sep 2004 09:29:13 +0100
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>Hi James,
>I liked this. There's an old gravel pit close to my house and earlier this
>year the Canada Geese on it seemed to be swimming around in exactly the
>fashion you describe. Very purposeful, old and young alike, just sweeping
>from one end of the pool to another. Just as a matter of interest, what
>type
>of geese did you have in mind?
>I'd keep "in that light" because I think it can be read in a number of
>ways.
>Perhaps the second stanza could be changed to:
>"They moved in a single long line,
>necks and heads aloft,
>masts before feathered craft"
>That's just personal preference, because you've already used "like" in the
>first stanza.
>Good read IMO, and I'll look forward to seeing the others in the sequence.
>Regards,
>Matt
>
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>This is part of a new river poem sequence. Comments would be welcomed.
>
>
>Today I counted 165 geese
>swimming like an invasion flotilla upstream -
>in that light they chose a dull day
>though one in which
>the river was calm and sharp to the eye
>
>They moved in a single long line
>with necks and heads aloft like masts
>before feathered craft
>
>that moved quietly in an agreed accord
>that knew what came next
>that knew I watched
>with the confidence of those whose intentions
>will not be changed
>on a day when no other bird is present
>
>
>bw
>James
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