My favourite hate! Slugs, yuk. If I were God,( and let the world tremble at the thought) slugs would be first to go. Then dandelions........... Hey, I have a list here, believe me. It goes with my advanced and still advancing years. Arthur.
-----Original Message-----
From: The Pennine Poetry Works on behalf of Bob Cooper
Sent: Tue 07/09/2004 13:00
To: [log in to unmask]
Cc:
Subject: Re: poetry challenge: Bob's Poem
Hi Sue,
I've just had a go at your suggestion.
You say the reader should be able to identify it...
(I know you are clever by giving images at the end of your piece that ain't
similies, ain't adjectival, but they cleverly are! I like that!).
So, remembering what I saw last light, and feeling fairly lyrical this
morning, here goes:
Such Sluggish Thinking
Although you’ve sensations
you’re water that crawls
probably clean but sliming
pavement, doorstep,
brick and, now, window
to gleam such colours
so slowly you don’t move
in our minds that are absorbed
by a moment’s revulsion
that lasts all evening.
Then, as we spit out toothpaste
while it creeps down the porcelain
may we remember your movement
and as we wake and squirm,
stretch ever so slowly
in our beds, your shape.
Bob Cooper
>From: Sue Scalf <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: poetry challenge
>Date: Sun, 5 Sep 2004 18:44:16 EDT
>
>Write a poem about a person, place, thing without naming it directly.
>Don't
>use adjectives or adverbs. You should do enough so that the reader can
>identify it anyway. Here is mine:
>
>Visitor
>
>An iridescence
>in the dawn
>flits from flower to flower,
>takes a sip of nectar
>from a rose, tumbles a daisy,
>jostles the bee,
>hums a hymn
>to summer and to brevity.
>He hovers in a zigzag,
>darts and disappears.
>We gasp and breathe
>and wonder. . . did we see him at all,
>or did a rainbow shatter
>or a jewel explode?
>
>Sue Scalf
>http://www.members. aol.com/poetscalf
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