I got a strong sense of the pyramids from this poem.  I love the way it
flows.  What half-worked for me is "green".   Nile grass seems like it
should be something else besides "green" it seems more mysterious than the
word "green" portrays to me.  I hope this is helpful.  Annabelle

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Aeon

A vermilion bird flutters high
the sky a sapphire remnant
A woman whispers   Step near
    Stand beside me

Nile green grass glides
like a crocodile in the breeze
The man hovers  glimpsing a scarab
jumping through her hair
They perceive lifetimes of love
their rise and fall within eternity
Date palm fronds throw short shadow

The late day sun inflames
They step closer   kiss

The rising new moon grins

Ryfkah 8/25/04